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Friday, September 30, 2011

"Forbidden" #FridayFlash, #FridayFictioneers, #100words



Every Thursday, I look forward to seeing what photo Madison Woods will post on her blog as our prompt for Flash Fiction Friday. And every Friday, I look forward to reading the variety of stories the Friday Fictioneers have created. Visit Madison's blog and have a peek!

Here's my story for the week, based on Madison's photo above:

Forbidden

He departed in the Spring, leaving only a feather behind.

“Pick it up and think of me,” he said. “I will return to take you to my world.”

But how can I leave my world for his? And he surely cannot stay on this earth with me. Still, I do not doubt our love as I come to this creek each morning; stare at his feather; long to pick it up; imagine his wings enfolding me.

In the summer, the creek, like my tears, will  dry, and the wind will carry away what is left of him. My dark angel.
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13 comments:

  1. RussellSeptember 30, 2011 at 8:49 AM

    Very nice. Leaves a lot to the imagination. I like that.

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  2. K.D. McCriteSeptember 30, 2011 at 9:25 AM

    Jan, you are a great writer. This is sweet, bittersweet, and lovely.

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  3. Jan MorrillSeptember 30, 2011 at 10:07 AM

    @Russell - thank you. That's one thing I like about flash fiction - it leaves a lot to the imagination. :)

    @K.D. McCrite - that means a lot, coming from such a wonderful writer as you. Thanks!

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  4. AnonymousSeptember 30, 2011 at 12:07 PM

    Wow Jan. I love this story! The ending totally grabbed me! The writing is so amazing - hard to believe it was only 100 words! Well done...

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  5. Siobhan MuirSeptember 30, 2011 at 12:13 PM

    Nicely done! I'm yearning right there with your MC! :)

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  6. Karen NelsonSeptember 30, 2011 at 12:49 PM

    Favorite line: "In the summer, the creek, like my tears, will dry". Great!

    http://kbnelson.wordpress.com

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  7. Sonia LalSeptember 30, 2011 at 4:01 PM

    Nice! I really like the angel part.

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  8. Tiyana MarieSeptember 30, 2011 at 7:50 PM

    My thoughts are long the same lines as KD's: bittersweet loveliness. :)

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  9. AnonymousOctober 1, 2011 at 6:43 PM

    Hi Jan, I'm going to try to leave a comment again ;) My feet are crossed under the table for good luck.

    I loved your story about the dark angel - it's a take on the feather I didn't even consider. Thanks for being a great FridayFictioneer founding member :)

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  10. AnonymousOctober 1, 2011 at 6:44 PM

    whoo-hoo! It worked :)

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  11. Jan MorrillOctober 1, 2011 at 7:29 PM

    Thanks for trying again, Madison! I made a couple of changes, and I was hoping that worked. I look forward to Fridays, thanks to your Flash Fiction Friday. Have a good weekend!

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  12. Jack LaBloomOctober 3, 2011 at 4:10 PM

    That is beautiful, Jan. Your ability to see a great story unfold from a photo and translate your vision into prose is pure genius. Thank you for sharing your insight with us.

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  13. Jan MorrillOctober 3, 2011 at 4:44 PM

    @Jack LaBloom, thank you! I've enjoyed making stories from a picture for as long as I can remember. You need to join our Friday Fictioneers!

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